Montage sequence (rough improvement)
Instead of Betty carrying one tray with all the food, I thought it might add to the character's predicament by making her carry more than one tray. So on the last third of the montage when Betty carries two trays and an ice-cream glass, she could try to balance one on her head.I have kept with the original idea of when we see William eating, the camera gets closer and closer to his face making the actions of him eating more and more in your face.
Shot 24 - William ties his bib
This was initially a concept I was going to leave out of the film, but I feel that making William appear with a bib without showing him how he puts it on. Although acceptable to do this, I think the quirky character I have got going for him can shine a little more through secondary action of him putting his bib on. I also think showing the bib and him smiling to himself foreshadows the upcoming montage sequence where he asks for all the food Betty has.
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