Monday, 14 October 2013

Story Development - Story Outline 2

I've gone back to my original story outline and changed some things. I've kept with the businessman forgetting his wallet idea, but I want to change and exaggerate the waitresses' reaction to this. Here's my improved story outline.

It's New Year's Eve and Glady's is stuck at work. All her friends are getting ready to party without her. There are five minutes left on the clock and not one customer is in sight. Glady's is about to close the diner a minute early until she hears the bell above the door sounds ...

A man in a fancy business suit enters and takes a seat at one of the booths. Thinking she might be able to score a huge tip from the man, she puts her pinny back on, forces her best smile and goes to take his order. 

The man, being greedy, orders everything off the menu. The waitress cannot believe her luck ... she wants to leave and go party with her friends ... but this man is loaded! She's sure to get a huge tip! She starts to imagine all the clothes, shoes and wine she can buy ...

After struggling to prepare, cook and serve the man all his food, the waitress presents the bill. Her hair is a mess and her uniform is stained. The man shrugs his shoulders. He has forgotten his wallet. The waitress is not happy. She has been played and has decided to phone the police. 

She storms to the kitchen where the phone is. Realising he is in trouble, the man attempts to sneak out of the diner. But he cannot. His stomach has expanded to an extreme size and has trapped him in his booth! Noticing a stick of butter out of the corner of his eye, he tries to reach for it. Finally managing to grab it, he uses it to free himself out of the chair and runs for the door. He turns around to check the waitress hasn't noticed him. Not looking where he is going, he slips on a banana peel and flies through the air. Hurtling towards the door, he thinks the butter on his clothes will save him and he will simply slide through the door frame to freedom! He misjudges and gets stuck in the door. The police then arrive and arrest him.


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